04-24-2011, 09:04 AM
content -wise; very profound, very excellent, very very good (jmo)
it feels that the poem is about questioning the self and getting an answer we didn't expect.
i really loved it. and i think it's publishable. again jmo.
my nit. for me it needs enjambment. the reader needs a little time to catch breath in order
to follow the poem. that said it's just my opinion and i still think ita very good poem no matter how it's written.
this way it a prose poem with enjambment it's not so much a prose poem.
thanks for a great read fd
it feels that the poem is about questioning the self and getting an answer we didn't expect.
i really loved it. and i think it's publishable. again jmo.
my nit. for me it needs enjambment. the reader needs a little time to catch breath in order
to follow the poem. that said it's just my opinion and i still think ita very good poem no matter how it's written.
this way it a prose poem with enjambment it's not so much a prose poem.
thanks for a great read fd