04-23-2011, 08:00 AM
the 1st apart from the enjambment on L1 of the 2nd verse
feels pretty dark, does the 1st line need a comma after year?
a couple of good images. and i love the lennon reference
the 2nd i felt was almost a work of art, def publishable,
it has depth and feeling and also a smidgen of wit hehe.
i can't find anything to fault with it, which is rare
thanks for the read
feels pretty dark, does the 1st line need a comma after year?
a couple of good images. and i love the lennon reference
the 2nd i felt was almost a work of art, def publishable,
it has depth and feeling and also a smidgen of wit hehe.
i can't find anything to fault with it, which is rare
thanks for the read