Someone Who Will Truly Care

[billy]

hi grace or Ch,
the meter feels a little shaky it could do with having some kind of pattern.
the poem does have a lyrical quality to it which helps dispel the differences in meter a little.
if feels as though it's saying huge amounts but really it's just saying
"i need someone to love"

while i enjoyed it, i think it needs some solid images like the one below, which is a great one.

Someone to understand the bottle of emotions
Hidden on the shelf

how do you want to be kissed, hugged, etc. give some strong images, it what emotional poetry craves for.
all that said it could pass as a song as is with a small chorus.

thanks for the read, hope to see more