04-23-2011, 07:15 AM
This reads more like a song than a poem, but is none the worse for that. It's a charming little piece. My favourite line:
"Someone to understand the bottle of emotions
Hidden on the shelf"
Very evocative. Good piece, Crystalheart.
P.S: You need a "to" after "someone" in the first line of the penultimate verse.
"Someone to understand the bottle of emotions
Hidden on the shelf"
Very evocative. Good piece, Crystalheart.
P.S: You need a "to" after "someone" in the first line of the penultimate verse.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe