Pictures of the Dead Poets
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this is good enough without pictures jack though
i can see that if you shaved berryman he would look a lot like carmen Smile

i keep faltering on this line;
above her spinster’s blouse in them, her smile

for me it feels in need of some grammar somewhere though i'm not a grammar expert hehe.

other than that i thik it excels. not sure if deirdries specs are universal enough for many readers to understand but i do,

thanks for the read.

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Pictures of the Dead Poets - by heslopian - 04-12-2011, 07:05 PM
RE: Pictures of the Dead Poets - by billy - 04-13-2011, 01:45 PM
RE: Pictures of the Dead Poets - by heslopian - 04-13-2011, 01:55 PM
RE: Pictures of the Dead Poets - by billy - 04-14-2011, 11:54 AM
RE: Pictures of the Dead Poets - by heslopian - 04-14-2011, 05:16 PM



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