04-11-2011, 01:23 PM
My mother has just invested in a couple of Betty Boop dolls to go with her clowns and Franklin Mint plates, so reading this amused me somewhat.
(04-04-2011, 06:39 PM)billy Wrote: I love the sultry wink of Betty Boop.I really like this. It's one of those observational poems filled with an irreverent whimsy which make it a delight to read. It also has a lot to say about straight male sexuality, which I found interesting.
She sits on my mouse mat begging
for sex and offering to give me
sticky lip-gloss kisses. I like this. It sounds vulgar without really being vulgar.
She stretches an outlined leg
into the upper left hand corner,
and wears her heart on a garter.
I wonder if she wears panties.
A short red mini dress
rides pale pink thighs,
and heavy black mascara
adorns her lashes Shouldn't that be "adorns"?
as it would on some flamenco
dancer in repose Does this need a separate line?
between a heavy stomp session in ruby reds.
her nose is button small
her breasts are just as cute "Breast" should be plural.
almost perfect for someone not so tall.
I never noticed her head size till now,
the pouting bow of her lips distracted me.
did an on the fly edit using addy's suggestions.
2nd on the fly edit using jacks grammar advice. left the dancer in repose line as it was,
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe

