A distraction while thinking what to write.
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(04-04-2011, 06:39 PM)billy Wrote:  I love the sultry wink of Betty Boop.
She sits on my mouse mat begging
for sex and offering to give me
sticky lip-gloss kisses.
She stretches an outlined leg
into the upper left hand corner, I like the addition of this detail, the reminder that this is a 2-d drawing

and wears her heart on a garter. funny line
I wonder if she wears panties.
A short red mini dress
rides pale pink thighs comma maybe?
and heavy black mascara adorn her eye
lashes and brow like on some flamenco cow the phrasing tripped me up here
dancer in repose
between a heavy stomp session in ruby reds.

her nose is button small
her breast are just as cute
almost perfect for someone not so tall period here maybe?
I never noticed her head size till now,
the pouting bow of her lips distracted me.
Nothing much to correct here imo. Just a cheeky fun poem Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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RE: A distraction while thinking what to write. - by addy - 04-08-2011, 11:17 AM



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