The Mistress

[billy]

The Mistress


Hours spent waiting is hours spent needed, would it be strong with just 'Waiting' as the first line?

mentally painting
perfect pictures

dreaming
inexplicable dreams

patiently crocheting credible metaphor
credible collusion

Sober moments
painfully hard
though
thankfully few

Yearning for
that picket fence
from behind
the stone wall good image

True love
almost shared.

great to see your first poem Jetz.
it has some good images in it, and the alliteration works well in the 1st three couplets. the poem itself has a good flow to it and gives a good image of what a mistress's lot in life is. i like that it isn't harsh or bitter, but that's just me. great first poem to start with.

thanks for the read.