04-01-2011, 09:43 AM
Thanks guys. Don't worry Ris, I take fake 'rep. points,' too. 8^ )
billy, I am not often the one to re-do my poetry, but you do have a point; this is an old poem and there are some elements that I think are a little 'hokey' (e.g. "As tears are cried 'cause I can't stay"), so I'd say I could improve it, and now I have a mind to actually do some editing.
Yeah, I know I use ocean/sea/lake synonymously in this one, for effect. But, if it is made up of tears, it is definately not a freshwater lake.
billy, I am not often the one to re-do my poetry, but you do have a point; this is an old poem and there are some elements that I think are a little 'hokey' (e.g. "As tears are cried 'cause I can't stay"), so I'd say I could improve it, and now I have a mind to actually do some editing.
Yeah, I know I use ocean/sea/lake synonymously in this one, for effect. But, if it is made up of tears, it is definately not a freshwater lake.