Shortly After My Heart Attack

[billy]

Not much I can say now in terms of edit...it's got a great feel and lots of great images. The opening couplet with the vestal virgin could have been boring, but following that up with a dry observation of your testicles was inspired . The sense of macabre alienation and violation was excellently palpable... but its the course wit of the narration that really makes it shine.

The only thing I can see is I think the misspelling of "unscratchable". Other than that, this was very nicely done.

thanks for the kind words addy;

i went off the spelling of unmatchable i can't fine a spelling of unscratchable

thanks for the i to I jack