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Killing Memories
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03-25-2011, 06:21 PM
The original last line was "and try to break the binding ties", but I felt that that was too cliche so I changed it. I thought you might mention the meter. I established the rhythm purely by ear, hence the wonkiness. I'm just too lazy to measure my syllables haha. Thanks for the feedback Billy.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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Killing Memories - by heslopian - 03-25-2011, 05:52 AM
RE: Killing Memories - by Verbavore - 03-25-2011, 01:22 PM
RE: Killing Memories - by heslopian - 03-25-2011, 04:59 PM
RE: Killing Memories - by billy - 03-25-2011, 06:18 PM
RE: Killing Memories - by heslopian - 03-25-2011, 06:21 PM
RE: Killing Memories - by billy - 03-25-2011, 06:57 PM
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