03-25-2011, 05:37 PM
Personally, I liked the line 
... you have to be really bored to be that self referential. Lots of great, refreshing lines in this piece ( the opening line, "tissue curled, pale foetus", "Unknown Pleasures" is wonderfully apt), and I like that you gave it the title of what could be a mundane diary entry. Very nice.
... you have to be really bored to be that self referential. Lots of great, refreshing lines in this piece ( the opening line, "tissue curled, pale foetus", "Unknown Pleasures" is wonderfully apt), and I like that you gave it the title of what could be a mundane diary entry. Very nice.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?