03-23-2011, 06:57 PM
I really liked this one, the silly nonsense in it made me grin and cheered me up immensely. Just needs a little correction. In line four, replace either "admire" or "admiration" because using both in the same line is redundant. Also, I think its grammatically correct to drop the "the" in the last line.
Thanks for the read
Thanks for the read
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
