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Yearning

Yearning
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03-22-2011, 04:48 PM
3rd and forth work well jack, particularly like the 3rd.
i was a litt lost by the 1st
and the 2nd has a couple of cliché which feels too much in such a short verse.


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Yearning - by heslopian - 03-21-2011, 07:43 AM
RE: Yearning - by billy - 03-22-2011, 04:48 PM
RE: Yearning - by heslopian - 03-22-2011, 05:35 PM
RE: Yearning - by billy - 03-22-2011, 05:44 PM
RE: Yearning - by Ris Yerg - 03-22-2011, 05:54 PM
RE: Yearning - by billy - 03-22-2011, 05:57 PM
RE: Yearning - by heslopian - 03-22-2011, 05:59 PM
RE: Yearning - by heslopian - 03-24-2011, 05:19 AM



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