03-16-2011, 06:02 PM
Thank you for your feedback Billy. I'm a little surprised you didn't like the last verse but loved the rest. I thought the ending was the strongest part, and much of what precedes it slightly weak. Though I agree with you about his fuck the world indifference, I think he cared where his next drink would come from. He detested live readings as he felt them beneath him as an artist, but did it for the money and free booze. I might add a few more verses if a good enough idea encourages me to return to this poem.
Thanks again for the kind words and feedback.
Would "filthy" work better than "naughty"?
What do you mean you deleted the duplicate?
Thanks again for the kind words and feedback.
Would "filthy" work better than "naughty"?
What do you mean you deleted the duplicate?
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe