(content warning) Writing With a Boner

[addy]

i always needed silence to work
silence of the mind as well as in the room (I really like this line. Elegantly put.)
but now sitting here with constricted jeans
pausing to pull down my zip
just so the pressure will ease

lines still emerge like sunk artefacts
bobbing up through the scum (great image in these last two lines)
on the surface of a lake

i imagine your buttocks
small yet plump
dimpled and pitted through maturity
like fruit left on the loam to ripe (again great imagery)
how i'd kneel down
and kiss each side (I like how simple yet expressive this was)
explore with trembling fingers
your waste

and then your navel like an eye
from where your mother's cord was cut (These last two line are ace . Just perfect)
a relic saved for adulthood
so i could probe and study it (These lines were beautifully worded, but I'm struggling to decide if they add anything)

i always needed silence to work
silence of the mind as well as in the room (Though the repetition of the verse works, imo you don't need to repeat this line)
but now sitting here with constricted jeans
pausing to pull down my zip
just so the pressure will ease

lines still emerge like sunk artefacts
lines I've gleamed from your body (Very nice ending, imo. It makes me think of the dick as a divining wand )

Not much I can object to here, really. You have a talent for turning the crude into loveliness... great work as always.