03-04-2011, 12:05 PM
the 1st first sets up that you want
so in less poetic terms it reads as;
i want you
but i shan't pretend
if only you were less of a twat
it might have worked
and been perfect.
out of time;
first off, think of a metronome
the 1st 2 vesre had a soft beat/rhythm/flow/softness
the rest were harsh/fast/a different tempo content wise. one was ice cream and post cards, the other was rimming assholes and licking bowels.
the 2nd way i meant it was;
at first we (I) get a feeling of a period piece, the cards, the beach, the promenade, the old age.
then it moves to the ultra modern ass rimming. not sure if that makes sense. (imagine granny at a rave or a sex swapping party in black leather with a carrot up her ass, that would be out of time, not in step with what we thought)
i think two poems would be a great idea jack.
so in less poetic terms it reads as;
i want you
but i shan't pretend
if only you were less of a twat
it might have worked
and been perfect.
out of time;
first off, think of a metronome
the 1st 2 vesre had a soft beat/rhythm/flow/softness
the rest were harsh/fast/a different tempo content wise. one was ice cream and post cards, the other was rimming assholes and licking bowels.
the 2nd way i meant it was;
at first we (I) get a feeling of a period piece, the cards, the beach, the promenade, the old age.
then it moves to the ultra modern ass rimming. not sure if that makes sense. (imagine granny at a rave or a sex swapping party in black leather with a carrot up her ass, that would be out of time, not in step with what we thought)
i think two poems would be a great idea jack.