Diatribe of the Virgin Homosexual

[billy]

my Sodom is deserted,
the frame houses razed
and the cinders removed,
the lone salt idol long vanished
(she was a woman anyway). wouldn't change a thing in the 1st

my windows are open
but no one climbs in, this could be a sexual metaphor lol i love it
no trainer on the sill
signals a presence,
only the cold
washes through the trees would washing work better?
like a housewife kneading
fresh white dough. not sure the simile works well enough(Don't laugh but would 'fresh white underpants work?)

on screen men like me should there be a comma after screen?
are Byronic studs,
courting their fellows
like characters from
one of Oscar Wilde's wet dreams. strong lines
with shining torsos
and tormented eyes
they lust and long feels cliché
and discover themselves
while awaiting an award
for their bravery.

why are these actors always white?
always with perfect arses and
high on faux testosterone,
leaning and wincing like apes,
as though a hint of effeminacy
is the sign of a lesser human? i would change a thing in this verse

I was not raised in Wyoming,
the sixties precede the year of my birth,
I'm not a cowboy
nor do I tend sheep,
so why am I supposed to find common ground
with the story of Brokeback Mountain? great two lines great question

were the love scenes that tender?
or were they simply erection starters? good couplet and image

perhaps I'm just bitter?
yes, that's probably it.
when you're nineteen and never been kissed
and girls want to make you their fey wind up toy,
and men ask with horrified fascination,
like gawkers at the scene of some gruesome crime,
just how you can do "what you guys do,"
bitterness spreads like stain on a sheet
from a newly slain hymen. i personally don't think this line is needed, for me it makes the poem weaker

it has a real feel of a male Sylvia jack, sardonic, cold, cruel, (no cruelty intended)
it's tell and showy at the same time. it's like brushing past grey flannel skirts in the sixties. i think you've captured an image, feeling if you will of being an outsider perfectly. the poem carries anger and pain and also a resignation as to ones lot in life,
it also felt extremely sad. all JMO of course.
there was much to like about the read jack, thanks.