Like The Surgeon's Knife--revision 2

[waitingforgodet]

Convalescing at home,
but I am not alone.
On my chest, St. John Keats.
(Would a semi-colon work better here?
If you don't think it's imperative, then that's
fine.)
His verse To Fanny piques
open his ravaged heart,
(grammatically, does this make sense?
I'm not the biggest fan of references to
literature within poetry, but that's just
my opinion)
vies to heal by his art.
(This sounds strange. You're working
with six-syllable lines, so things are
fairly demanding. "Vies to heal" is clumsy.)

My right, Henry Thoreau.
(This is fine, if a bit abrupt
I don't think the period is necessary.
It adds a nice enjambment if removed)
Pens Walden Pond to show
he’d not conform and tries
(How about "He'll"? Present tense
normally works better than past,
almost as if it's all unfolding before
your eyes.)
to heal through nature’s eyes.
("Nature's eyes" is a tad abstract and
cliche. Perhaps use something more
specific than nature?)
Whip-poor-wills help us cope.
( I do not like this line. Jarring.)
The Woods will give us hope.
(I do like this line)

My left, Albert Camus.
Unmasks our milleau,
(Good rhyme. I like it)
indicts us in The Fall
with our sickly call
(How about a verb instead
Of an adjective?)
for grins of subterfuge
gilded by modern rouge.
(I've noticed something-
The rhythm is a bit off.
You should look into iambic-
pentameter and stresses/unstressed
syllables.)

As I lie in this bed,
their words live in my head.
("Live" is weak.)
And like the Surgeon’s Knife
that saved my own short life.
(I'm not sure I understand this
reference.)
What Fate that might have been.
(Try a - or a ; instead of a period)
No poems, books from them.
(Good close)

This version is better. I think you've ironed out some of the wrinkles, but there's still more to be done, in my opinion.
Keep writing!

Lawrence, you've taken such care with your analysis--you do possess a great technical eye. A few suggestions I will use, yes, He'll is better than he'd, for example. You've given me a few other things to think about too. Love my whip-poor-wills, though. I thank you--jim