windows

[billy]

a thousand windows pass me by,
the majority lighted, allowing view of corridors,
whitewashed walls and half-glimpsed doors.
the bus curls round them like wrapping paper
and in the dark they become eyes;
I wonder how many students live there,
if any of them have caught sight of me.

it's so hard to give an in depth crit of a short poem if you really like it.
okay here goes, seeing as you've used grammar i think caps should also be used where they would normally go. after all they are part of grammar.
would allowed work better instead of allowing on the 2nd line?
loved L3, and L4. L4 invokes a feeling of closed community.
i also like the rhetorical question and answer of the last two lines.
it gives the poem that day dream state we get when travelling by bus
all in all i found the poem a delight to read. it was light and airy, the transition of light to dark worked effortlessly in opening up the eye metaphor. reversing the role voyeur.

thanks for the read.