The Next Best Award

[waitingforgodet]

The next best award would be, is next needed?
ah, yes, what women have given me. is ah yes needed?
Accolades of love, sex and sensuality
imbued with varied scents and tonality.

But unlike notions of regret, is but needed?
it is best that I do not forgot, is that needed?
The key to their magic kingdoms aside,
They dwell in my heart wherever they reside.

And from them there lies perennial joy.
Not a mere fabrication or mind-set ploy
but a real and tactile memory
indelibly placed by this species of femininity.

Indeed the next best award I’ll ever know
til the next owns my heart and doesn’t go. these two lines feel forced

for me the poem needs at least three solid images, 1 in each verse. while end rhymes can carry a poem. internal rhythm makes it lighter, easier to read. if possible use at least 3 poetic devices in a poem of this length.
you have end rhymes which is one. assonance and alliteration are the most commonly used. (jmo) imagery should be one of the most important along with meter. if possible try and get an internal rhythm going by using meter. not all lines have to have the same meter but rhyming poetry does work best with some kind of pattern to the meter.

for instance an 8887 syl verse is common. as is 87876 verse. what we want to establish is a flow, the way the words trip of the tongue. a great way to notice the flow/meter apart from counting the syllables is to read the poem out loud in your normal force, pretend you'd never seen the poem before. i like the concept and intent of the poem and think a minor edit could bring out a great write.

thanks for the read jim.(all jmho)

I like what you said, Billy. Thank you.