Like The Surgeon's Knife--revised

[Lawrence]

I'm skeptical of the adjective "young" because John Keats is nothing but young. He died when he was in his twenties, so I would take this into consideration.

The first period is a bit jarring. Would a comma work better?

"Genius through Nature’s eyes
glimpsed Redemption and Hope.
The Pine would help us Cope."

"My left, Albert Camus.
Wrote of what ails us too."

To me, this is your strongest couplet. "My left" gives me a nice picture.
Redemption and hope are very abstract. While some people enjoy abstractions, I prefer more concrete poetry.
Light to my life seems a little meh. Perhaps replace this with something different?