Fire Burning Slowly

[addy]

As hot as fire, it burns to touch
My mind set "mindset" just one word evil, looking to destroy
I don’t usually hurt people, well not much
I’m making you my pawn, my toy

I’ll twist you’re your bones Is it "I'll twist your bones?"
Make you cry, hear your screams through the night
Your just another ugly kid, just another drone
When you think I’m done, well you better keep your eyes shut tight

The howling winds of winter, don't need comma won’t cover up your pleads
Cause’ in my house no one gets to leave
Once, twice the stabbing of the heart, they won’t find the missing leads
That’s what they did to mine, and it just heaved

As hot as fire, it burns to touch
My mind was set evil, looking to destroy
I don’t usually hurt people, well not much
I made you my pawn, my toy

There are good images here, and I like the narrative voice you write with (can easily slide to vernacular, but still refined). My biggest suggestion, probably, is to phrase your lines so you don't always have to break them up with commas, which I see a lot of in the poem. It's all right to have them sparingly, but using commas to break up phrases too much defeats the purpose of line breaks in the poem. It's still best to make wise use of your line breaks to break up your phrases the way you want. Just imo