Fire Burning Slowly

[billy]

As hot as fire, it burns to touch 'as hot as fire' is a common phrase in poetry (cliché) if you think you heard a phrase before then it's prob cliché
My mind set evil, looking to destroy
I don’t usually hurt people, well not much
I’m making you my pawn, my toy try and give an image, how will i be you're paw etc

I’ll twist you’re your bones
Make you cry, hear your screams through the night images, give one to make us feel
Your just another ugly kid, just another drone
When you think I’m done, well you better keep your eyes shut tight

The howling winds of winter, won’t cover up your pleads pleas
Cause’ in my house no one gets to leave
Once, twice the stabbing of the heart, they won’t find the missing leads
That’s what they did to mine, and it just heaved

As hot as fire, it burns to touch
My mind was set evil, looking to destroy
I don’t usually hurt people, well not much
I made you my pawn, my toy

i think you have the base for a good poem Tigress. with a few images and a few less cliche i think you can make this shine. jmo.
while the end rhymes work they do feel a little forced. feel free to ask about anything you'r not sure of.

thanks for the read.