02-05-2011, 10:44 PM
Great idea, Jack; for me, anyway, shows the genius of a young boy who copes with difficult circumstances through the wonderful and therapeutic vehicle of Alice In Wonderland--I agree with Billy that a few commas, articles can be left out, also an adjective or two dropped would make the syntax stronger--and maybe I'm way out there in thinking that any reference to Micahael Meyers *or those movies should be eliminated entirely--The only image needed here is Alice In Wonderland juxtaposed with the boy's circumstance, this, I think, makes the poem universal, classic even. I would not even call Carrol's story strange, but something along the lines of great, monolithic, delectable, for I think it is what saves the boy against all the harshness he faces in life, would even elaborate on difficulty in school (bullies, etc.)--for me, anyway, this poem could be a great one showing how the greatest healing can be done through imagination and equally important is that no matter what, nothing can touch him within the gated protection of his mind--jim
The lines pertaining to the mother are wonderful.
*I haved never seen a Michael Meyers movie except for a few minutes once--the horror in the boy, the difficulty he encounters is remedied by Alice In Wonderland--and somehow I would put all three words on the title in this poem.
The lines pertaining to the mother are wonderful.
*I haved never seen a Michael Meyers movie except for a few minutes once--the horror in the boy, the difficulty he encounters is remedied by Alice In Wonderland--and somehow I would put all three words on the title in this poem.