02-03-2011, 09:58 PM
The first poem overcomes possible "emo" stereotypes by almost calling attention to such bleeding heart cliches; it's a mischievous, witty, somewhat satirical piece, which also works at times as just deeply moving verse.
The second one, as Billy said, is nothing but great, a profoundly tender and serious work, getting to the core of addiction and despair, as well as co-dependent relationships.
Regarding the third, I would remove all punctuation, as a poem that short and simple can only be interrupted by commas and ellipses and so on (IMHO). Other than that, while not as strong as its predecessors, it's a pleasant little piece, vaguely reminiscent of old Asian verse, in its straightforward wisdom and direct style.
The second one, as Billy said, is nothing but great, a profoundly tender and serious work, getting to the core of addiction and despair, as well as co-dependent relationships.
Regarding the third, I would remove all punctuation, as a poem that short and simple can only be interrupted by commas and ellipses and so on (IMHO). Other than that, while not as strong as its predecessors, it's a pleasant little piece, vaguely reminiscent of old Asian verse, in its straightforward wisdom and direct style.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe