02-02-2011, 10:21 PM
I would suggest removing all of the commas and ellipses at the end, as in such a short piece they interrupt the flow, but other than that I like this piece; it's grim and witty and clever. Thanks for the read.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe