The Woman, The Pet and The Bad Boy

[waitingforgodet]

I think your suggestion of eliminating a few articles, a phrase or two does tighten the poem up a bit. I read it out loud with your suggestions and it does sound better too. Thank you. I'm also going to attempt this piece as a short story too just to see what happens.

I'm not sure what you mean by "very understated yet loud."--perhaps you could explain a little.

Thanks again--jim