01-26-2011, 10:08 AM
the 2nd part is superb. and virtually book worthy from my POV.
it just has so much going for it. the words and lines work just right.
i haven't picked a fave line because most of them are such, or lead to such.
i wish i had written something as good.
the 1st part!
for me not as good as the 2nd but still good in int's right. i hate the becum word,
(maybe just me) but it sort of makes the serious stuff less dramatic.
some great lines again though for me a little enjambment would go a long way.
i enjoyed the twist in the fantasy which took us to the 2nd part.
thanks for the read LA.
it just has so much going for it. the words and lines work just right.
i haven't picked a fave line because most of them are such, or lead to such.
i wish i had written something as good.
the 1st part!
for me not as good as the 2nd but still good in int's right. i hate the becum word,
(maybe just me) but it sort of makes the serious stuff less dramatic.
some great lines again though for me a little enjambment would go a long way.
i enjoyed the twist in the fantasy which took us to the 2nd part.
thanks for the read LA.