01-23-2011, 06:04 PM
This one made me LOL 
... the last verse was my favorite. I agree that the enjambment needs a little work, so there's more consistency in the length and rhythm of each line (not just the rhyme at the end). Enjoyed this one... thanks for the read 
... the last verse was my favorite. I agree that the enjambment needs a little work, so there's more consistency in the length and rhythm of each line (not just the rhyme at the end). Enjoyed this one... thanks for the read
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?