01-23-2011, 05:51 PM
I really like what you did here... your expression of beauty as strength gave this piece an interesting and solid core to work with. Many of the lines were lovely indeed (I'm quite reminded of "She walks in beauty..."), but a few could be spruced up a little ("it lives within you everyday" for instance, could be rephrased for potency). Some real nice work. Thanks for the read!
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?