01-21-2011, 02:16 PM
I love the tone of this, and the almost reluctant sensuality of your descriptions, toeing the line between innocent and dark. At first I thought the way you ended it was abrupt, but with re-reads I grew to really like it. Fantastic work, as always 
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?