01-21-2011, 11:41 AM
Hi good to see you again LA. if you need a nic change just send me a pm with the name you want to be seen.
first off i have to say.; for me it needs just a little work on the enjambment
2nd i have to say, this is one of the best poems i've read in a long while. like most it has a few things that wouldn't go amiss with a small edit (which i won't say here as it's the mild crit forum
) but it's rich and has some fantastic imagery. i really would be proud to put my name on this one. so, so many good lines. if i pointed them out most of the poem would be covered.
all i can say is i really enjoyed the read, it has a different sadness than the usual sad poem it's like a happy sad poem which is weirdly good.
thanks for the read LA
first off i have to say.; for me it needs just a little work on the enjambment
2nd i have to say, this is one of the best poems i've read in a long while. like most it has a few things that wouldn't go amiss with a small edit (which i won't say here as it's the mild crit forum
) but it's rich and has some fantastic imagery. i really would be proud to put my name on this one. so, so many good lines. if i pointed them out most of the poem would be covered.all i can say is i really enjoyed the read, it has a different sadness than the usual sad poem it's like a happy sad poem which is weirdly good.
thanks for the read LA