The Doldrums.

[billy]

I like the mysterious dark tone of the piece, and the very stark visuals you used... reminds me of classic seafaring tales.

In the second stanza, I think you can remove "it stood."... saying "poking through the surface" is sufficient. Instead of "their ropes...", saying "Ropes coiled like serpents" is also fine.Also, I don't think it's necessary to separate that third stanza, but that might be just me.

Thanks for the read

thanks for the feedback addy. i've made the changes you suggested except for the third verse thing, as they were only minor.