01-08-2011, 06:44 PM
Why are you apologising for giving detailed feedback? That's the only kind of feedback I seek, though I myself am incapable of giving it sometimes. I find it interesting that you didn't like the "flowers for my own left hand" line. For the commenters on DUP that was what made the poem. This is why I love poetry: it's such a fertile ground for debate
The engineer line in the first stanza probably made sense to me at the time, but looking back I don't get it either, so I'll remove it once I've finished this.
Thank you as always for your kind words and critique
The engineer line in the first stanza probably made sense to me at the time, but looking back I don't get it either, so I'll remove it once I've finished this.
Thank you as always for your kind words and critique
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe