01-07-2011, 10:08 AM
the body of the edit:
to lap iron water
under a jaundiced sun.
Gold, dappled by a late frost,
turned frail.
i think both couplets help the reader better see the poems intent because they give more clarity. (jmo)
to lap iron water
under a jaundiced sun.
Gold, dappled by a late frost,
turned frail.
i think both couplets help the reader better see the poems intent because they give more clarity. (jmo)