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A Weavers Daughter.
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01-06-2011, 02:04 PM
I agree with Todd, excellent edit. I know I recommended it, but reading the revised version, I think I'd remove the comma after "lay-offs" and just have no punctuation there at all. Also I'd remove the capital from "Men" in the penultimate line, unless you're referencing something that's gone over my head.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-03-2011, 11:21 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Lawrence - 01-03-2011, 06:16 PM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Touchstone - 01-04-2011, 12:51 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-04-2011, 10:12 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by addy - 01-04-2011, 08:32 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-04-2011, 10:14 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-04-2011, 10:18 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by heslopian - 01-05-2011, 07:53 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-05-2011, 05:30 PM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Todd - 01-06-2011, 12:28 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-06-2011, 10:55 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Todd - 01-06-2011, 12:11 PM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by heslopian - 01-06-2011, 02:04 PM
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