01-04-2011, 10:14 AM
(01-04-2011, 08:32 AM)addy Wrote: Lovely piece. Not much I can say, but maybe in the first line "out of the sound" doesn't suit the scenario perfectly since you talk about suddenly noticing the girl's scent (or perhaps this is on purpose?)... nevertheless it's nice. My favorites are the last two lines, which elevated the poem beautifully for me.you spotted todays special mistake addy hehe.
it should have has "walked" befiore vexed. thanks for the feedback, i'll change that one right away.