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A Weavers Daughter.
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01-04-2011, 08:32 AM
Lovely piece. Not much I can say, but maybe in the first line "out of the sound" doesn't suit the scenario perfectly since you talk about suddenly noticing the girl's scent (or perhaps this is on purpose?)... nevertheless it's nice. My favorites are the last two lines, which elevated the poem beautifully for me.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-03-2011, 11:21 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Lawrence - 01-03-2011, 06:16 PM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Touchstone - 01-04-2011, 12:51 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-04-2011, 10:12 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by addy - 01-04-2011, 08:32 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-04-2011, 10:14 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-04-2011, 10:18 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by heslopian - 01-05-2011, 07:53 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-05-2011, 05:30 PM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Todd - 01-06-2011, 12:28 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by billy - 01-06-2011, 10:55 AM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by Todd - 01-06-2011, 12:11 PM
RE: A Weavers Daughter. - by heslopian - 01-06-2011, 02:04 PM
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