01-04-2011, 12:51 AM
The poem is in the first person--you're describing what you perceive as opposed to being an all knowing narrator describing what a character perceives.
"Her eyes hid pain her mouth would never utter"
You wouldn't be able to perceive that her eyes were hiding pain unless...they weren't hiding the pain.
So...her eyes reveal the pain her mouth would never utter...[Or something like that. Its late and I'm not sure of the tenses.]
"Her eyes hid pain her mouth would never utter"
You wouldn't be able to perceive that her eyes were hiding pain unless...they weren't hiding the pain.
So...her eyes reveal the pain her mouth would never utter...[Or something like that. Its late and I'm not sure of the tenses.]
"The fool doth think he is wise, but the wise man knows himself to be a fool."