Yesterday

[Todd]

Hi Lawrence,

Some great lines here! This may just be my preference (probably is) and it doesn't mean that there's a flaw in the poem by going another way, but I think I only like the repetition of yesterday in the first couplet. It works very well with fossils. That aside, a few comments below:

Yesterday’s snow sits frozen on my sidewalk
Embracing the fossils of yesterday.--love this. It works visually. Snow sits frozen is very cool. The only call out is do you need MY? The might make it a more universal observation.

Yesterday, autumn reclaimed the sky for awhile,
And clouds wept themselves like oak trees, yesterday.--just a thought: I'm not sure what for awhile buys you (yes I know it refers to winter winning the battle) but what about cutting "for awhile" and pulling up "and clouds" adding the necessary punctuation and breaking there--it might be stronger. Again just a thought up to you of course.

Yesterday, before rain and its erasers craft came--nice idea but the line feels awkward to me
And tried to wash away the wine-glasses and footprints of yesterday.--I like this

Yesterday, when I felt flint strike steel and the comfort of a closing---couple things: I don't know if you need "when I felt" if you pull it you would probably need to change strike to struck. I wasn't following and the comfort of a closing
Heard the book slam shut upon itself, yesterday.--like this

Yesterday shall sit like a hand-print sunken into sand
And I will not welcome anything else.--fantastic ending

I very much liked this Lawrence. Its a well crafted poem. My issues may for the most part be style choices.

Best,

Todd