01-03-2011, 11:37 AM
(01-02-2011, 04:16 PM)Lawrence Wrote: Yesterday’s snow sits frozen on my sidewalkit feels like the writer is glad to be out of the old year and into the new one. i'm not keen on reiteration in poetry but the way you use yesterday works well for me.
Embracing the fossils of yesterday.
Yesterday, autumn reclaimed the sky for awhile,
And clouds wept themselves like oak trees, yesterday. [i struggle to understand the metaphore or simile, though perversely enough i love the line]
Yesterday, before rain and its erasers craft came [eraser's]
And tried to wash away the wine-glasses and footprints of yesterday.
Yesterday, when I felt flint strike steel and the comfort of a closing-
Heard the book slam shut upon itself, yesterday.
Yesterday shall sit like a hand-print sunken into sand
And I will not welcome anything else. [a grand line]
the first along with the last two couplets i felt were particularly good though i did stumble on the 2nd one.
as always thanks for the read lawrence
