Billy,
Really like this one. The repetition is good. The rock of the pendulum line is excellent. My only suggestion (jmo) is to pull the "Do they dream" out and maybe make it the title.
It was a good read.
Best,
Todd
Really like this one. The repetition is good. The rock of the pendulum line is excellent. My only suggestion (jmo) is to pull the "Do they dream" out and maybe make it the title.
It was a good read.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson