Wow! Best poem on here (wouldn't have thunk it 
). Thanks Lawrence I'll give the last stanza some thought. I look forward to your further comments.
Best,
Todd
Maybe something like this Lawrence (so far I can't think of anything I like better than stir the ashes at the end--though almost anything can be cut). Optional Last stanza:
It frightens you to hear their prayers,
when I am the final outcome.
The stars remain cold,
and all your sons die.
I alone remain to stir the ashes.
). Thanks Lawrence I'll give the last stanza some thought. I look forward to your further comments.Best,
Todd
Maybe something like this Lawrence (so far I can't think of anything I like better than stir the ashes at the end--though almost anything can be cut). Optional Last stanza:
It frightens you to hear their prayers,
when I am the final outcome.
The stars remain cold,
and all your sons die.
I alone remain to stir the ashes.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson