Love Poem

[heslopian]

i like how this one has progressed jack. sometimes i see a poem get to much of an edit (over edited) this one just got enough, maybe the shoe adjective can be sorted but on the whole i think it's a great working edit. jmo

Thanks Billy I much prefer the couplet I devised to begin the poem after reading your comments, so I think this has developed quite well. I'm often afraid of editing my work lest it fall apart, therefore this small success is all the sweeter