12-08-2010, 08:58 PM
I can't really mention anything that hasn't already been said about this poem. "Like a photograph developing backwards" is an awesome line; it's something I might play off of later.
Just one thing: "battered shoes" sounds kind of weak. I don't know if " battered" is the best way to describe them...
But this is just my preference. Perhaps there's a better adjective?
Thanks as always.
Just one thing: "battered shoes" sounds kind of weak. I don't know if " battered" is the best way to describe them...
But this is just my preference. Perhaps there's a better adjective?
Thanks as always.
