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[heslopian]

The jungle sings
a million tones Would a comma help the rhythm here? Also, would "notes" make more sense? That may just be me being ignorant though.
pacifying concrete’s million
tints of grey

canopies that will
no longer shelter fern and frond
shout a singular defiant shade Can you shout a shade? Again, this may just be my ignorance.
to civilised Starbuck's coffee cups
sipped from; In my opinion, punctuation in a poem should be all or nothing. One solitary mark looks shabby to me. Also, the syntax here seems slightly confused. Do you need the adjective "civilised," or the words "sipped from"? They sound a bit blunt and add too much (IMHO). And could you shorten "a singular" to "a sole"? I feel that might improve the rhythm.
alfresco at the corner of the mall

a pox and plague
of open wounds
fester by the asphalt scars Fantastic image.
wallets lined
with high-rise smog
and leaves of paper green Ditto.

the jungle sings
a million tones
concrete trumps the notes
with grey Like the idea of the closing refrain.

I love how this has a message, but doesn't pound it in like a horny freshman nailing his first prostitute. It has great imagery and unique ideas.