11-28-2010, 11:02 AM
Jack,
Love the poem. No issues with it! One suggestion though if you were going to use the picture with it at all times, a good title that would grab people would be the numbers on the pills: "44-357". I don't know how that would go over but I think it might be cool to do.
I especially liked these lines:
I'm just a little Englander, attending a feast
beyond my palette's comprehension.
Best,
Todd
Love the poem. No issues with it! One suggestion though if you were going to use the picture with it at all times, a good title that would grab people would be the numbers on the pills: "44-357". I don't know how that would go over but I think it might be cool to do.
I especially liked these lines:
I'm just a little Englander, attending a feast
beyond my palette's comprehension.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson