11-25-2010, 10:21 AM
I like how it's more of a mood piece, which describes the experience of traveling by train pretty well I imagine (I've only been on long road trips by car or bus)... you just get this nice impression of the scenery and the moments that pass by. Perhaps you can add a punch to that last line by relating it more to that theme (love as travel/journey). Thanks for the lovely read 
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?