Lillith Incarnate (content warning)

Lillith Incarnate (content warning)

billy Offline

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11-24-2010, 06:18 PM

for me it's a much tighter write.
though i preferred the chorus as a repetitive verse.
the door whispers edit works much better

an excellent edit Wink

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Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by Mrs-Sin - 11-22-2010, 08:27 PM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by billy - 11-22-2010, 10:05 PM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by billy - 11-23-2010, 06:00 AM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by addy - 11-23-2010, 12:14 PM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by Todd - 11-24-2010, 02:44 AM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by Mrs-Sin - 11-24-2010, 04:49 PM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by billy - 11-24-2010, 06:18 PM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by Todd - 11-24-2010, 10:31 PM

RE: Lillith Incarnate (content warning) - by addy - 11-25-2010, 10:41 AM

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